Replies to post #3586 on The Next Online Brokerage - Built By You

[occams_razor]

nice job!

[Mattu]

Beautifully written.

I'd only have minor changes and will roll this together with the other one and send it to you.

The two changes would be including Bob and making it clear that IH/SI ownership isn't included in what Ken's wanting to propose to him. Oh and that I'm from the gigantic metro town of TALLAHASSEE, not Pensacola. :)

[BullNBear52]

Trump's expertise is real estate not snake oil. The only thing he could possibly bring to OCS is name recognition. Considering the plight/blight of his Casino company I'm not sure that is a good thing. Maybe it's time to create that board here on Ihub and add it to the hot stocks board list.

[Chrisau]

Very good and I completely agree with Caveat #2. This is what a business letter should be.

[BullNBear52]

Leave the details out. First see if he bites then discuss them face to face.

If you accept our offer, you will receive [insert explanation of equity arrangement, leverage, return, etc. here]

[Old_Drummerman]

Brief and to the point. Very good, imo. (Assuming the inserts are as brief and concise and fit the flow of the draft.)