Replies to post #45315 on SPOOZ Inc (SPZI)

[MRKCO]

"songbirdia" A little more concise and attention getting.

Kind of following the speed theme with the race car only more dramatic in the allusion of speed. For example.

"Traders, using SpoozToolz trading technology, speed from conception thru execution at 90 THOUSAND BITS PER SECOND".

"While the world traders are bogged down in data transmission, missing investment opportunities, Spooz surges ahead at warp speed providing greater windows of opportunity."

While there are many facets of SpoozToolzV2 to accentuate, it seems to me that none are able to be dramatized as is the speed of data transmission. A good hook captures the prospect's attention to get him or her to the wordy part.

The second paragraph is a little long however the first is under 20 words.

MRKCO

[MRKCO]

"songbirdia" A little more concise and attention getting.

Kind of following the speed theme with the race car only more dramatic in the allusion of speed. For example.

"Traders, using SpoozToolz trading technology, speed from conception thru execution at 90 THOUSAND BITS PER SECOND".

"While the world traders are bogged down in data transmission, missing investment opportunities, Spooz surges ahead at warp speed providing greater windows of opportunity."

While there are many facets of SpoozToolzV2 to accentuate, it seems to me that none are able to be dramatized as is the speed of data transmission. A good hook captures the prospect's attention to get him or her to the wordy part.

The second paragraph is a little long however the first is under 20 words.

MRKCO